雅思考试写作回顾 2019.5.27

2019.5.25 雅思考试作文回顾

- 扬州美伦雅思新托福

TASK 1

题目：2011-2014年三年下雪量变化。

类型：线图／动态图（图片待补充）

考点／写作要点：

动态柱图要注意每一项的趋势变化，需要在起点、终点、转折点进行适当比较

类似题目：The chart below shows the depth of snow (cm) in a particular ski resort in Canada in three individual years.

范文：

The bar graph compares the depth of snow changing over six months over three typical years in Canada. In general, the snow was much heavier in February, March and April in comparison with that before January.

In November, December and January, the depths of snow were all below 170 cm annually, while that in year one and three were much more stable than that in year two when the data dropped from 90 to about 70 followed by a rise back to 120 cm. In contrast, data in year one and three increased by roughly 30 cm every year from Nov. to Jan.

This condition changed greatly from Feb. when the average snow depth of three given years all remained at approximately 400 level. In fact, the depths in year one was the highest both in Feb and Mar, which approached 450 cm. In Apr, year two had the highest level, with a staggering 470 cm.

Overall, it is clear that Feb to Apr were the snowy time of year in this ski resort and thus was probably a better time to visit.

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TASK 2

In many parts of the world, children and teenagers are committing more crimes. What are the causes of the phenomenon? How should they be punished?

范文：

Youth crime contributes significantly to the increasing crime rate in the modern society. There is no doubt that these young delinquents take their punishment, but I prefer in different ways.

In China with the economy booming, pressure from competition at work and business force parents to work hard, leaving insufficient time to their children. Without enough love from the family, these adolescents tend to do something astounding, sometimes slip beyond control. In addition, the one child policy in my country also contributes to higher crime rate because these little “emperors” are brought up in such a way that some of them are self-centered and tolerant of little. When confronted with difficulties or injustice, they are prone to resort to violence.

When teenagers commit crimes, surely penalty should be given, especially the youth who commit serious crimes such as homicide or rape. No one should be excluded from justice, and justice has to be served. Depriving criminals of their freedom by imprisoning them, no matter how old they are, is the most effective measure to prevent crime and protect the lawful civilians in the society. Violent teenagers are as dangerous as their mature counterparts, hence should be put behind bars until they are no longer a threat to the public security.

On the other hand, most teenager crimes are minor, like vandalism, fighting or theft which does not do serious harm to victims. The immature behave in an illegal but less violent manner mostly for fun, or to show their courage to impress their peers or to attract their busy parents’ eyes. In these cases, they should be given some opportunities to be corrected and eventually come back to the right track rather than being judged as adults who commit crime deliberately with full awareness of the consequences of their conduct. Instead of being jailed, young lawbreakers can be forced to repair the damage to their neighborhood or local community, and offer their sincere apology to the victims or do some community duties such as serving the elderly in local nursing home.

To sum up, I personally reckon that political policy and the utilitarianism of educators should be responsible for today’s increasing juvenile delinquency. I agree with harsh treatment under the circumstances of serious crime, but if the offence is not major, adolescent criminals should be given alternative punishments.